Actually, looks pretty good!
I'm no expert, but did manage to increase draw speed a lot. even though I'm an old geezer. it was simple, but not easy. Daily dry fire with the par timer. Really pushing to beat that second beep, then dropping it a tenth and repeat. Initially there were gains, then....stagnation. But with daily drills it grooved the motion and after 10 months a bubble burst and speed was found. (Weird but true)
I'm still slow at SEEING, and have other issues like inconsistent grip pressure and trigger control (and even a flinch on occasions). Yeah....lots left to work on.
One point on your draw. When I started to REALLY try to go fast, it felt like tearing muscles. Seriously. so, when you grab the gun and rip it out if the holster...think PUNCH the gun out with knockout force as hard and fast as possible.